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Sebastian's avatar

Enjoyed your first foray into historical fiction! The red bulb blinking on cinematically over the confessional was a masterstroke.

I think my favorite part of the story might have been the God Machine's "failure": Malcolm discovers that it can't always detect the presence of God, not because God isn't there, but because *the bulb filament is broken* --- we are the ones who fail to detect Him.

Can't wait to see what you write next!

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Bob Smiley's avatar

Thanks you Sebastian!

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Lisa Dillon's avatar

So good Bob. Love all the historic details and the ending was really touching.

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Bob Smiley's avatar

Thanks Lisa! Appreciate you reading.

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FLOWSTATE: Season 1's avatar

“ As Dorothy toiled away on her twelve-hour shifts, she liked to imagine her husband might soon be handling one of her bomb casings,”. Bwahahahaha!!!!!

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Bob Smiley's avatar

That part wasn’t supposed to be funny @FLOWSTATE but I’ll take it.

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FLOWSTATE: Season 1's avatar

If you have a “Dorothy” in your life this line makes more sense comedywise

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